2084

Dear Sir, Madam
Please hold
A member of our staff will be with you shortly.

Good Evening.
Thank you for your submission.
However we are afraid that there is something
almost obscene
About your latest work.
We are afraid that we shall not be able to publish it.

We feel, that the presentation is
too stark
we are afraid, that there is a rawness
in the body of the piece
a sense of sinuous twisting
exposing a harshness a bleakness a brittle whiteness
or a pulsing singing
visceral
core -

- We believe
We sincerely believe
From necessity that this work is intrinsically,
Fundamentally incorrect.
We hope that you understand,
That we must be selective,
And until you strive to improve
We will not be able to continue.

4 AM Poetry – The Product of Insomnia

To translate into the language of night;
half-waking thoughts,
half formed.
In learning to transmit
through a new medium
Not only thought but touch;
sound resounding against skin
But when transmuting fluidity
base mermaid alchemy -
a pause -
ah.

I asked for a prompt

And was given this: “well today as i was running there was a man who was kinda creepy standing and waiting to cross with an umbrella and i imagined him throwing it and it puncturing me through my back and through my stomach…but thats all i got. sorry”

What have I been listening to recently?

Just a little playlist. WordPress is anti-embedding, apparently – so click on the ‘Pop-Out Player’ button.

Glamorous Indie Rock and Roll – The Killers: From their B-sides and rarities album ‘Sawdust’. This seems more like a track from ‘Sam’s Town’ than ‘Hot Fuss’. Nostalgic, retro and retrospective, overarching, dramatic. The lyrics are characteristic of The Killers – modern, expressive, colloquial yet with a touch of the poetic. Download.
The Bucket – Kings of Leon: From their 2005 album ‘Aha Shake Heartbreak’. Not the most poetic lyrics, but lyrics-as-poetry probably wouldn’t suit the style of the music. However, in saying that, the words of the chorus are evocative with the contrast of the mundane and the extraordinary. Wonderful, inspiring, almost poignant chorus. It sounds almost yearning. The vocalists voice and how he sings is very interesting, and the instrumentalists are quite solid as well. Download.
Low Happening – Howling Bells: From their 2006 self-titled debut album.  Good vocals, good instruments, good melodies, good style….insipid lyrics. Though the lyrics for this song aren’t that bad, and the line ‘my love shot right through you’ is rather catchy, other songs feature such lines as ‘broken bones may hurt but a broken heart will never mend’, sung with all the gravity of a serious revelation. Download.
Razorblade – The Strokes: From their 2006 album ‘First Impressions of Earth’. I love, admire, Julian Casablanca’s voice. It’s raw and for loss of a better word, expressive. Also love the intertwining of the guitar and vocal melody. I’m glad that distortion is used less for the vocals on this album than on their previous albums. Download.
The Call – Regina Spektor: From the original soundtrack for The Chronicles of Narnia: Prince Caspian. The lyrics and general mood of the song fits the movie qutie well. I’ve always felt, though, that the strength of Regina Spektor’s appeal lay not so much in her actual voice but in the musicality, composition and arrangement of her songs. Not a great song, but pretty good. Download.

3 am

Things start to look like this.

That time of the year again

It’s mid-year crisis time. Similar to the mid-life crisis, but repeated per annum, rather than per vitae.

That time of the year when you wonder – what have I done so far in the year? – what have I done so far in life? – and find that the answer is “nothing much”, or as my venerable friend Macbeth would say “signifying nothing”. At these moments, you meditate not so much on the kindness of strangers but on their callousness. It’s a dreadful lethargy.

Rhythm

oh keep me locked away
yes
a little while
as I
as I
collect poets in bunches
of carnelian carnations for a
coronation
let me rise
let me rise
in a litte while
oh how I see

A little something

The product of a little free-writing exercise.

2099

Dear Sir
Please hold
A member of our staff will be with you shortly.

Good Evening.
Thank you for your submission.
But we are afraid to say that there is something
almost obscene
about your latest writing.
We are afraid that we shall not be able to publish it
unless you
correct it.
Your lines are too thin. We are afraid that we can see something
almost like truth.
We are afraid that there is something
almost too stark
in the body of your piece. And it reminds us of bone.
Please edit it. And erase those profanities.

We hope you understand,
That we must have substance.
And until you improve your work,
We will not be able to continue.

 

All the writing on here, any of it, I find that I don’t like it. I don’t like it as my own work, and I’m not very impressed by it either. So. Expect some great editing, stylistic overhaul in the near future.